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Post Options Post Options   Quote Mark L Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 31 July 2013 at 18:22
OK, here's my 2p worth.

I think it's already been said, but if you ensure that the background is far enough away from the subject it will remain black, unless the flash is very powerful.

You have correctly identified the framing problem; cutting off the side of the the nearest girl's hair was not a good idea in this case. There should be at least some space between the girl and the edge of the image.

The pose seems awkward and stiff to me. The right hand girl seems a bit tense. The expression on the dark haired girl's face is much better. Then the girl at the back is slightly hidden; I think we need to see at least a bit more of her. And by placing one girl on front of the other you have ensured that the one in front dominates. Her head appears larger than the head of the dark haired girl and because she is closer to the left hand light, the highlights on her face are more exposed than those of the dark haired girl.

I see what you were trying to do with the lighting, but in my view it could be improved. The right hand light could do with less power in my view and I would not have placed it so far down. I'm not sure why you wanted to conceal the difference in skin tones, but I think you have overdone the gel somewhat. It doesn't look like a tan to me, more a mistake in lighting or colour balance.

So to summarise: move both girls to the left a bit, bring the dark haired girl forward round the other girl's shoulder, get the fair-headed girl to relax a bit more, move the right light upwards a bit and get rid of the gel (or use a less intense gel). Then I think you would have a usable image.

I see you were using aperture priority. I would suggest manual exposure and manual flash. That way you have more control.
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Post Options Post Options   Quote CuriousOne Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 01 August 2013 at 07:33
Thanks everyone, I will consider suggestions for next session and post the results here. I'd like to add some short notes:

Usage of aperture mode.

Since AF is doing a lot of errors, I have to use manual focus mode. And because DOF is quite limited, I have to use focus magnifier to provide precise focus. On my Sony SLT-A57, when using fully manual mode, focus magnifier does not works.

Choice of "models".

Here, due to local traditions, it's very hard to get adorable girl for modeling shots for the affordable price. Ones that will agree for shooting for low price or free, look very hmmmmmm :) I agree, that dark haired girl is much more open, natural looking and has nicer shapes in overall. Below are some shots with her:

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Post Options Post Options   Quote ifreedman Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 31 August 2013 at 02:54
I missed this pic while I was on vacation. After reading through the (great!) feedback you've already received, I wanted to add one thing.

In the orig. picture, the girls look naked, but the way they're posing and the way you compose the original shot doesn't feel like it's appropriate for a nude shoot. It looks like they're sisters or friends - people who wouldn't normally be posing nude together. It made me wonder if they were wearing strapless dresses that you just happened to cut off.

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